Yesterday at least 100 employees, neighborhood residents, business owners, and customers were evacuated from an area south of Market in San Francisco after a private construction crew severed a 2-inch underground gas pipe with a backhoe. The police have cordoned off the streets around Folsom and eleventh Street shutting down a four-block radius causing a back-up in traffic. One of the people affected by the gas pipe break was Carlann Lauria; a store manager at Crocker's Lockers which is a self-storage company on Folsom near
Another business manager in the area is Samantha Feldman of Wa-Ha-Ka restaurant, who says her employees and patrons were forced to leave. The restaurant is located at the corner where the construction crew had been working. The shutdown caused Feldman's restaurant to lose about five-hundred dollars worth of business. After several attempts to get in touch with PG&E, a representative said the gas has been turned back on.
Whoa! Your lead is way too long. Simplify it, and break it into three paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteSimplified lead: More than 100 people were evacuated from the South of Market area yesterday after a construction crew severed an underground gas pipe with a backhoe.
The police cordoned off (not have cordoned off -- that makes it sound like it's still blocked off ... but it's not.)
Simplify/tighten up: Lauria's employees kept busy by going outside the police perimeter to collect customers' payment checks.$500 worth
Last paragraph: A PG&E representative said the gas was turned back on at 5:09 p.m.
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