Thursday, April 16, 2009

Alternative Broadcast Project

FULL CIRCLE FARMSTAND (radio news story)

LAC

04-17-09

IF YOU’RE LOOKING FOR ORGANIC AND FRESH PRODUCE LOOK NO FURTHER BECAUSE FULL CIRLCE FARMSTAND IS NOW OPEN AGAIN IN SUNNYVALE. THE STAND WAS CLOSED FOR THE WINTER BECAUSE VEGETATION WAS NOT GROWING IN THE COLD CONDITIONS.

THE PRODUCE OFFERS A VARIETY THAT RANGES FROM LETTUCE, BROCCOLI AND TOMATOES TO EGGPLANT AND MORE. THE 11-ACRE FIELD IS ALL ORGANIC AND PESTICIDE-FREE. HEALTHY EATING IS EMPHASIZED TO ALL VISITORS AND SAMPLES OF CERTAIN VEGETABLES ARE AVAILABLE UPON REQUEST.

ONE OF THE GARDEN MANAGERS MELISSA PATEL SAYS VOLUNTERRS ARE ALWAYS WELCOME AT THE FARM TO HELP WITH UPKEEP. TO BUY THE LOCAL PRODUCE THE STAND IS OPEN ON WEDNESDAYS AND FRIDAYS FROM 3 TO 7 PM. IF YOU WOULD LIKE TO VOLUNTEER CONTACT THE VOLUNTEER COORDINATOR AIMIE FRISCH AT 4-0-8-3-9-4-1-4-9-8.

FULL CIRCLE FARMSTAND, THE PLACE WHERE FRESH ORGANIC PRODUCE HAS A TASTE THAT WILL KEEP YOU COMING BACK.

2 comments:

  1. You did the previous broadcast story in ALL CAPS -- why not this one?

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  2. This starts off OK, but your second sentence is unnecessary -- you're stating the obvious.

    Use punctuation to help the announcers know when to pause:

    * IF YOU’RE LOOKING FOR FRESH ORGANIC PRODUCE, LOOK NO FURTHER ... BECAUSE FULL CIRCLE FARMSTAND IS NOW OPEN AGAIN IN SUNNYVALE.

    * ONE OF THE GARDEN MANAGERS, MELISSA PATEL, SAYS VOLUNTEERS ....

    Proofread! You've got some typos and AP style errors (such as VOLUNTERRS and P.M.).

    20/25

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